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My Sega Short idea; Here my idea
Topic Started: Thursday Jan 2 2014, 12:41 AM (1,962 Views)
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Here my Idea that i want to create for Sega Shorts

Sonic is at City Escape just minding his own business then suddenly the Guns Truck start chasing him around the city then when he loose him at different stages and it still follow him and

Sonic Says: The person who chasing me must be the most crazy person on earth.

Then it was reveal that it was Omochao that was driving the truck Says: "Press the L button to... ramp over people ''then he starts evil laughing".

I want to know if its an good joke to animate for sega shorts.

Edited by DynastyKingdom96, Thursday Jan 2 2014, 12:42 AM.
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Despite the bad grammar, this short looks decent! You'll just have to see how the others like it.

Especially Smegerama. He practically knows what a good idea is.
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That sounds awesome. I may be able to help if you get a thumbs up. (If you are planning on getting subtitles, I can most definitely help. ♥)
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Thursday Jan 2 2014, 12:41 AM
Here my Idea that i want to create for Sega Shorts

Sonic is at City Escape just minding his own business then suddenly the Guns Truck start chasing him around the city then when he loose him at different stages and it still follow him and

Sonic Says: The person who chasing me must be the most crazy person on earth.

Then it was reveal that it was Omochao that was driving the truck Says: "Press the L button to... ramp over people ''then he starts evil laughing".

I want to know if its an good joke to animate for sega shorts.

I actually like this idea, but the execution is clumsy. Here's what I'd change:

(1) Cut Sonic's line. It's awkward and doesn't add anything to the joke.

(2) Omochao shouldn't be doing this on purpose. The idea of him accidentally causing mayhem while simply trying to teach people how something works is an amusing concept that could be played very effectively.

Oh, and you should post your ideas in this thread rather than making your own. It helps keep the forum from getting cluttered.
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Thursday Jan 2 2014, 06:28 PM
(2) Omochao shouldn't be doing this on purpose. The idea of him accidentally causing mayhem while simply trying to teach people how something works is an amusing concept that could be played very effectively.
OK, gonna expand on that:

Start out the short with Sonic running away from the city escape truck, then cut to a GUN soldier in the truck learning how to drive it for the first time with Omochao as his instructor.

Omo: "Press the gas pedal harder to increase your speed!"

GUN Soldier: "Like this?" *presses down on it harder*

*Suddenly the truck speeds up massively and the truck runs into a *bump*

Omo: Please avoid obstacles. Omochao must subtract ten points...

GUN Soldier: Agh....damn speed bumps...

*back of truck POV as it drives away, showing Sonic crushed by the massive vehicle*
Edited by Recorderdude, Thursday Jan 2 2014, 06:36 PM.
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I just wanted to say that maybe there's another direction you could take this.

Perhaps you could axe Omochao altogether, and play on the often pointed-out fact of all the collateral damage the GUN truck causes, or how it gets pimped out in Generations?

I always thought it was weird that one driver was so determined to get Sonic that he attached rocket boosters to his truck to drive on walls and catch a 3 foot hedgehog, all the while causing hundreds of thousands of dollars' worth of damages to the city. Imagine the expenses form for that one.
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Now I want to see GUN made into a sitcom about the uber-patriotic, xenophobic president of a privatized defense contractor with an overblown budget.
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Thursday Jan 2 2014, 06:33 PM
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Thursday Jan 2 2014, 06:28 PM
(2) Omochao shouldn't be doing this on purpose. The idea of him accidentally causing mayhem while simply trying to teach people how something works is an amusing concept that could be played very effectively.
OK, gonna expand on that:

Start out the short with Sonic running away from the city escape truck, then cut to a GUN soldier in the truck learning how to drive it for the first time with Omochao as his instructor.

Omo: "Press the gas pedal harder to increase your speed!"

GUN Soldier: "Like this?" *presses down on it harder*

*Suddenly the truck speeds up massively and the truck runs into a *bump*

Omo: Please avoid obstacles. Omochao must subtract ten points...

GUN Soldier: Agh....damn speed bumps...

*back of truck POV as it drives away, showing Sonic crushed by the massive vehicle*
OK thanks i try your idea.
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