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Topic Started: Monday Nov 25 2013, 01:29 PM (1,847 Views)
NathanTheKid
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I'm making a Sega Short and I have everything i need...
:OBJECTION!:
NO I DON'T!
I need a voice actor for Gilius Thunderhead.
Email me with your voice and I'll love you forever.
Here's the script: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZNsuq-XikP6f_qMxxDLLGpqUoir52K5LFfFn6b-aI7A/edit?usp=sharing


THANKS!
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Sonicyay2
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First off, welcome to Sonic Paradox. It's great to have you here.
Second off, for a first attempt, it's not a bad script, but it doesn't really have a very good joke. I can see some good stuff out of you, just not yet.
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ImPantsAtThis
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Quote:
 
Thunderhead: I told you Golden Axe is way better then Sonic.

Sonic: SHUT UP YA BIG FAT LIAR! I’M THE FREAKING MASCOT!


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I don't want to seem like a douche, but is this it? I could see these lines as argument lines into a build-up of something (say, SEGA characters fighting each other to be the new mascot after Sonic's games started to do poorly), but as they are, there's not too much of a punchline and it ends quite abruptly. Perhaps you should come at these lines from a different angle; ask yourself what WOULD make these two start arguing about petty stuff like this, and build a scene around that.

Also, the next time you're producing something and need voice actors, providing them with some direction is a great idea.
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Jinsoku
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Welcome, I hope you enjoy it here. Dan the guy above pretty much said much of it. Hm idea here, how about they both have booths at a convention and there's a bigger autograph line for Gilius then Sonics which in turn could be the said reason the argument starts.
Edited by Jinsoku, Monday Nov 25 2013, 06:51 PM.
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Recorderdude
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I can tell you right now that a short with that script wouldn't get in regardless of the animation quality. Pitch your idea to people in the ideas thread before you put the effort into animating it and getting VAs.
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john jobs

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Hay dude welcome to sonic paradox I see your short is not that good you need more improvements I you have not then go to the sega shorts guid ok you should build up the short like on how it started like how said above hope you like it here
Edited by john jobs, Tuesday Nov 26 2013, 02:36 AM.
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