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Topic Started: Saturday Aug 24 2013, 04:04 PM (53,043 Views)
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I got an idea for a short. :huh:

Beat: *speeding very fast*

Combo: Yo, kid! Wait up!

Beat: *walking up the stairs fast*

Combo:*walking on the stairs very slow losing breath* Damn, how could *inhale* he run *exhale* so damn fast. *trying to breathe his last air* Wait a minute, I'm walking with skates. *fell down the stairs*

How do you like my idea. :sonicla:
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okay, so right now I'm working on a sonic short which you can see here!
and there's an idea for a nights short
nights playing pokémon, the are you a boy or girl option screen shows up,
nights then gets confused, and slowly starts looking down....there...when
vector shows up from nowhere saying: Aha!
well, if you don't get it then that's because a lot of people claim it's a girl but actually nights' gender is unknown.
Virtua Cop
rage is walking slowly, one of the ''don't shoot me!" guys shows up from nowhere causing surprised Rage to
accidentally shoot him with a girly scream.
sonic 2...the pit
Mystic cave zone,sonic reaches the area where that damn pit is.
sonic: (looking to the camera) heh heh...not falling for this again.
he goes back...runs and jumps, but knuckles glides and hits him, he falls and says 'oh sh-' but the death
sound effect interrupts it.
the end.
(what do you think?)
Edited by sapphireshadow, Wednesday Aug 12 2015, 01:48 PM.
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Vectorman:
A bunch of shorts with Vectorman mesing around in the SEGA Screen.
Now this means shenanigans with/without the SEGA logo in said screen.
Edited by RGPAnims, Sunday Oct 4 2015, 05:08 AM.
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I'd like to get some feedback on this Idea of mine before getting to work on it. I have a few ideas, but so far, I can express this one the most coherently.

It is a commentary on the fact that The Ooze hasn't seen a re-release in years.

*We see a newspaper saying "A new re-release on an old Sega Genesis Classic!"*

*cut to the main character from The Ooze reading it*

*He sighs*
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Here's an idea:
Sonic and a few other Sega characters are racing in the beginner map in Daytona USA.
Whilst they are racing, Sonic notices a mountain carving of himself.
Sonic then says: “Well, look at that handsome devil!” He loses concentration and crashes into the mountain.
Sonic then recovers and looks up to find the carving crumbling. He then says: “Oh crap.” and gets crushed by the rubble. When the smoke/dust disappears, the carving of Sonic is now a carving of the word: Ouch.
What do you think?
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Monday Mar 7 2016, 03:03 AM
Here's an idea:
Sonic and a few other Sega characters are racing in the beginner map in Daytona USA.
Whilst they are racing, Sonic notices a mountain carving of himself.
Sonic then says: “Well, look at that handsome devil!” He loses concentration and crashes into the mountain.
Sonic then recovers and looks up to find the carving crumbling. He then says: “Oh crap.” and gets crushed by the rubble. When the smoke/dust disappears, the carving of Sonic is now a carving of the word: Ouch.
What do you think?
:OBJECTION!: That is a one hack of good Idea
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Idea related to the game, Flickey That I was thinking of working on:

Sonic busts a flickey out of a robot

Flickey goes home to see his chicks acting bratty and to see threatening glares from Tiger and Iggy (the cat and lizard from the game)

Flickey leaves, saying, "Screw this, I'm Going back to Robotnik's"

Feedback would be appreciated
Edited by Sergeant 16-Bit, Monday Mar 7 2016, 02:30 PM.
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I think I suggested this a long time ago, but I made a few revisions today, so here it is again (if you're allowed to do that).

Game: Dynamite Headdy (1994)
Level: Backstage Battle (Stage 3-2)


Spoiler: click to toggle
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Tuesday Dec 10 2013, 10:46 AM
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Tuesday Dec 3 2013, 09:03 PM
I can see this working particularly well if it's in space, but that sounds a lot like the 'life support system' joke from earlier on to me...
If it's in space, they could balloon up and explode due to the low pressure.

...yeah, I think I need to go see a psychiatrist. I'm clearly not well.
Suddenly, I see a post from a while ago...

Actually, in space, you wouldn't burst, according to a video I saw on Youtube.
SONIC FOREVER!!!
POKEMON FOREVER!!!

I want to go to Sonic's world so badly it hurts...
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I got this idea from reading an idea by supersonicgp456 and Kyoko Soryu's response to it on page 25.

*Sonic reaches a roller coaster (in one of the stages that has a roller coaster)*
*There is a sign nearby that says 'you must be at least this tall to ride'*
SONIC FOREVER!!!
POKEMON FOREVER!!!

I want to go to Sonic's world so badly it hurts...
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llirbwerdnadivad
Monday Aug 22 2016, 05:00 AM
Kyoko Soryu
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If it's in space, they could balloon up and explode due to the low pressure.
Actually, in space, you wouldn't burst, according to a video I saw on Youtube.
It's called cartoon slapstick. At no point was anyone ever trying to be scientifically accurate. That aside, why would you dig up and respond to a random post from 2013?

llirbwerdnadivad
Monday Aug 22 2016, 05:02 AM
I got this idea from reading an idea by supersonicgp456 and Kyoko Soryu's response to it on page 25.

*Sonic reaches a roller coaster (in one of the stages that has a roller coaster)*
*There is a sign nearby that says 'you must be at least this tall to ride'*
I don't get it. I seriously mean that, I don't get what the joke is supposed to be. Is Sonic too short to ride the roller coaster? Is that it? Because that's not a joke. This feels like the setup to a joke, but the joke never happens.
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I am animator just to clear that up anyways this is my idea of a Sega short I will animate once I get feedback


We cut to a building saying tails pizzeria and then a sign saying employees wanted then we cut to alal eating frosted flakes with bananas and sonic telling tails all different types of pizza than tails yells stop than we cut to vector man seeing the sign walking pass and rips the sign up tails walks outside and tells him to stop he soon runs in the kitchen and starts shooting everything than he runs to the roof and throws the letters spelling vector man than big busts in through the wall yelling froggy than tails sits there looking bored but mad than sonic runs in and ask what happened and tails said he doesn't want to know
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Before we start, do yourself a favor and read this. It'll do you a world of good.

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I am animator just to clear that up anyways this is my idea of a Sega short I will animate once I get feedback

So you'll animate when you get feedback, regardless of what it is. Got it.

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We cut to a building saying tails pizzeria and then a sign saying employees wanted

Random premise, but with Tails in it. We're off to a good start.

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then we cut to alal eating frosted flakes with bananas

What does this add the short? Clearly it's not just a background detail, clearly you thought it was important enough to specifically cut to.

Also, who's Alal? I Googled it and got nothing video game related at all.

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and sonic telling tails all different types of pizza than tails yells stop

Again, this is pointless and does nothing but add runtime to your short. That's something you want to avoid.

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than we cut to vector man seeing the sign walking pass and rips the sign up

Why?

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tails walks outside and tells him to stop he soon runs in the kitchen and starts shooting everything

Why?

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than he runs to the roof and throws the letters spelling vector man

Why?

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than big busts in through the wall yelling froggy

WHY?

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than tails sits there looking bored but mad than sonic runs in and ask what happened

I'd like to know too.

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and tails said he doesn't want to know

Why wouldn't he want to know? Vectorman just showed up and trashed the pizzeria that Tails owns for some reason. Why wouldn't he tell Sonic? Sonic could do something about it.

This short would run like two minutes, makes no sense and isn't funny.

I can't figure out which parts are supposed to be the jokes. I guess Sonic listing different kinds of pizza to Tails, to which Tails gets frustrated and yells "stop!" is supposed to be one, but it's not funny and not even a joke.

Furthermore, this idea has nothing to do with any of these characters. You could swap them out for any other character and it would change nothing. The point of SEGA Shorts is that the jokes are based around the characters and their games. What you have here are SEGA characters partaking in random nonsense, which absolutely not the same thing.

Read the guide and this won't happen to your next idea.
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So you know the virtua fighter series right? It was on the Sega Genesis do you ever notice akira,s attacks is capable of a possible injury or even death like he did dural in the Japanese animie? What if he did that to someone in a fight and accidentally kills them

*my short*

*akira with a serious look

*kage with a serious look

*it keeps cutting to them with serious looks than kage sticks up his middle finger

*akira looka angry and charge at kage and execute hard moves than kage falls to the ground and bleed out than akira freaks out and runs around screaming sounding like a girl until pai from out of no where slaps him and thus knocking him out than the screen says you win perfect and she poses
Edited by Speed dragon, Wednesday Aug 31 2016, 01:23 AM.
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You are the first person who has ever listened to me when I told them they should read the guide. I'm genuinely proud of you for that.

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So you know the virtua fighter series right? It was on the Sega Genesis do you ever notice akira,s attacks is capable of a possible injury or even death like he did dural in the Japanese animie? What if he did that to someone in a fight and accidentally kills them

I like how you worded this. You explained what you were trying to do, and most importantly the idea is truly based in this specific franchise and the characters you chose to use.

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*my short*

*akira with a serious look

*kage with a serious look

*it keeps cutting to them with serious looks than kage sticks up his middle finger

This is a pretty good intro. You open playing serious but break the mood by throwing something silly into the mix.

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*akira looka angry and charge at kage and execute hard moves than kage falls to the ground and bleed out than akira freaks out and runs around screaming sounding like a girl

This is actually a decent joke, the idea of accidentally killing a character in a video game where wins come exclusively from KOs and never death. But I'm sorry to say it's extremely similar to the Sonic Short where Sonic is accidentally killed in Hydrocity and the badniks freak out because he isn't supposed to die at their hands. Again, it's a decent joke, just too similar.

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until pai from out of no where slaps him and thus knocking him out than the screen says you win perfect and she poses

This part I don't like. It feels random and superfluous to the main joke, which is funny enough on its own. Incidentally, a lot of the time "out of nowhere" or "suddenly" indicate you're doing something too random. Not always. Use your own discretion. "For no reason" however should always be avoided.

So yeah, this idea is a significant improvement your last one. The one problem a very similar idea has been done before, but that's not your fault. Keep writing ideas down, don't just post one by one. As you come up with ideas, write them down. Once you have a decent amount, pick out your funniest ones and post them here for critique. This isn't just an opportunity to get a short made, this is an opportunity to get your work critiqued by somebody with a lot of experience. I love writing more than anything, and I love helping people improve theirs.
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