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idea 1: starring: crazy taxi

a taxi driver was giving someone a ride up the mountain then suddenly the car runs out of fuel and starts slipping back.
Taxi driver: I cant stop the car!
Man: then stop the counter quickly!!

Idea 2: staring sonic the hedgehog:

Sonic was trying to join the freedom fighters are, so, rotor asked him some questions:
Rotor: what will you do if an eggpawn tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic holds a gun, sonic shoots, sonic kills!
Rotor what will you do if TWO eggpawns tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will hold an MPk47, sonic will shoot, sonic will kill!
Rotor: what will you do if an egg fleet tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will hold an rpg sonic will shoot, sonic will kill!
Rotor: what will you do if an ARMY attaked?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will eat shit! Isn't there any one else than sonic here?

Idea 3:

Sonic is going fast with his racing car, until he saw shadow at the end of the road, he tries to drift to avoid him and hits a wall.
sonic: (his face is full of blood and anger) didnt you saw me coming?
Shadow: I did, but I didnt remember who you are! :no:

idea 4: this should come after sonic and rotor's one:

A gay hedgehog tries also to join the freedom fighters, rotor asked him:
Rotor: what will you do if a soldier attaked?
The hedgehog: I will go to him and say: I hate you I hate you I hate you, then I'll mess up his hair and take his nevea (a haie gel)
Rotor: 0.o

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I have some quick Sonic Boom short ideas.

Considering Sonic's Redesign:

Sonic is shackled down on a table, struggling, but unable to move. Eggman comes in the room and orders Eggpawns to start rubbing some hair-growing tonic on his arms, so that they are as blue as his legs. Soon, the Eggpawns begin applying bandages to his freshly haired arms, and Eggman declares in an over-the-top fashion "Now when Sonic tries to take off those bandages, it will REALLY hurt! OH HO HO HO!"

Considering Knuckles' Redesign:

Knuckles, now all buff, takes up a dumbbell and lifts it high above his head with both arms. He chuckles, "Ha, I bet I couldn't do that in my OLD design, eh, Sonic?"

Sonic smirks and soon enough, Knuckles' feet snap like twigs, since they are still thin unlike the rest of his body. (Way to go Sega -_-)
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supersonicgp456
Sunday Aug 24 2014, 08:50 PM
a taxi driver was giving someone a ride up the mountain then suddenly the car runs out of fuel and starts slipping back.
Taxi driver: I cant stop the car!
Man: then stop the counter quickly!!

...I don't get it. How would stopping the timer help? And even if it would, it still wouldn't be funny.

supersonicgp456
Sunday Aug 24 2014, 08:50 PM
Idea 2: staring sonic the hedgehog:

Sonic was trying to join the freedom fighters are, so, rotor asked him some questions:
Rotor: what will you do if an eggpawn tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic holds a gun, sonic shoots, sonic kills!
Rotor what will you do if TWO eggpawns tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will hold an MPk47, sonic will shoot, sonic will kill!
Rotor: what will you do if an egg fleet tried to attak?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will hold an rpg sonic will shoot, sonic will kill!
Rotor: what will you do if an ARMY attaked?
Sonic: sonic will get back, sonic will eat shit! Isn't there any one else than sonic here?

I have several questions regarding this one:

Why would Sonic be using weapons (specifically the default weapon set from any given FPS)?

Why is Sonic referring to himself in the third person? I can't imagine a reason for him to do that.

Why would he be asked these questions in an interview? That's like going for a job at Home Depot and being asked "What would do with one box that needed to be moved to another shelf? Two boxes? Three boxes? etc." Of course it's going to overwhelm you eventually.

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Sunday Aug 24 2014, 08:50 PM
Idea 3:

Sonic is going fast with his racing car, until he saw shadow at the end of the road, he tries to drift to avoid him and hits a wall.
sonic: (his face is full of blood and anger) didnt you saw me coming?
Shadow: I did, but I didnt remember who you are! :no:

...what?

No, seriously, what? Not a SINGLE LETTER of this idea makes ANY kind of sense.

Are you saying that, if you were in the street and a car came screaming down the road directly at you, you would happily allow yourself to be splattered across the windshield if you didn't recognize the driver? Are you not concerned with dying, just about denting the car of someone you know? It's a noble sentiment, yes, but people you aren't friends with have feelings too. They could very well be traumatized too as they scrub your various chunks and viscera off of their vintage 1940 Plymouth, which mind you cost a pretty penny that'll pale in comparison to the repair bill.

...that aside, I assume the punchline is that Shadow forgot which one of them was Sonic, which is also both not funny and unimaginably stupid.

supersonicgp456
Sunday Aug 24 2014, 08:50 PM
idea 4: this should come after sonic and rotor's one:

A gay hedgehog tries also to join the freedom fighters, rotor asked him:
Rotor: what will you do if a soldier attaked?
The hedgehog: I will go to him and say: I hate you I hate you I hate you, then I'll mess up his hair and take his nevea (a haie gel)
Rotor: 0.o

Are you REALLY resorting to that lame stereotype? Are you REALLY that lazy that, not only are you unable write a joke that's even comprehensible without multiple readings, but you to stoop down to mocking an entire group of people? Even worse, doing so in the most obvious way possible?

You know, people have been making this exact joke since your parents were kids, and it wasn't funny then either.

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Sunday Aug 24 2014, 08:50 PM
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Please put more than the absolute minimum possible human thought into them next time.
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Here is a better one:

There was a doctor in a mind correction hospital for omo-choas. The doctor drew a door on the wall and he said:
The one who opens the door, I'll give him his own player to guide him!
All omo-choas ran to try openning the door, only a one was standing back.
doctor: why aren't you trying to open the door?
Omo-choa: they're all crazy, I'm the one who has the key!!
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Tuesday Aug 26 2014, 02:28 AM
Here is a better one:

There was a doctor in a mind correction hospital for omo-choas. The doctor drew a door on the wall and he said:
The one who opens the door, I'll give him his own player to guide him!
All omo-choas ran to try openning the door, only a one was standing back.
doctor: why aren't you trying to open the door?
Omo-choa: they're all crazy, I'm the one who has the key!!
I honestly don't get it, what's it building up too? What does this have to do with omo-choa?
You can place anyone in that scenario and if one did have a key how would it know if the door was just made... Unless it had a eraser or marker for a key. It just doesn't add up to me in any way.
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Tuesday Aug 26 2014, 05:18 AM
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Tuesday Aug 26 2014, 02:28 AM
Here is a better one:

There was a doctor in a mind correction hospital for omo-choas. The doctor drew a door on the wall and he said:
The one who opens the door, I'll give him his own player to guide him!
All omo-choas ran to try openning the door, only a one was standing back.
doctor: why aren't you trying to open the door?
Omo-choa: they're all crazy, I'm the one who has the key!!
I honestly don't get it, what's it building up too? What does this have to do with omo-choa?
You can place anyone in that scenario and if one did have a key how would it know if the door was just made... Unless it had a eraser or marker for a key. It just doesn't add up to me in any way.
That omo choa thought that it was the smartest, but ended the stupidest
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It's spelled "chao", not "choa". I know that's not really important, but it was really bugging me.

More to the point, while the joke isn't really funny, I will admit that it's better than your previous ideas. I can actually understand what the punchline is, and while it's not particularly clever, it's not terrible either. The setting doesn't really make sense, and there's nothing particularly Sonic-related about any of it besides the inclusion of an Omochao, but despite all that it's actually a coherent gag.

You're improving. Keep at it.
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In all honesty the best of my ideas for these shorts usually just come when I'm playing the game. Literally just playing Ultimate Genesis Collection gave me some good ideas that I'll keep to myself since I plan on animating them. You can think up of a ton of ideas just by questioning video game logic or their plot alone. My best advice is to play some old SEGA games for a few hours while viewing them in a normal and logical sense.
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Wednesday Aug 27 2014, 04:53 AM
In all honesty the best of my ideas for these shorts usually just come when I'm playing the game. Literally just playing Ultimate Genesis Collection gave me some good ideas that I'll keep to myself since I plan on animating them. You can think up of a ton of ideas just by questioning video game logic or their plot alone. My best advice is to play some old SEGA games for a few hours while viewing them in a normal and logical sense.
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Anyone ever come up with a short about how Sonic and Tails can't leave the animal capsule area in Sonic 2? Seriously, they beat one of Eggman's boss 'bots and free the critters, then, as Eggman flies away, they are unable to give chase due to some invisible wall that forces them to stay with the empty capsule. You could run off-screen to follow Eggman in Sonic 1.

I'm sure this could be played for a joke some way: maybe it's Sonic's idea to stay put and show off, with Tails pointing out all the horrible things Eggman could be doing in the time they are wasting at the capsule (a cut to it actually happening, perhaps)?
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Wednesday Aug 27 2014, 05:52 PM
Anyone ever come up with a short about how Sonic and Tails can't leave the animal capsule area in Sonic 2? Seriously, they beat one of Eggman's boss 'bots and free the critters, then, as Eggman flies away, they are unable to give chase due to some invisible wall that forces them to stay with the empty capsule. You could run off-screen to follow Eggman in Sonic 1.

I'm sure this could be played for a joke some way: maybe it's Sonic's idea to stay put and show off, with Tails pointing out all the horrible things Eggman could be doing in the time they are wasting at the capsule (a cut to it actually happening, perhaps)?
Ok then check this out:
Sonic and tails has defeated eggman at emerald hill zone,
Eggman: i cant blieve that you have hust defeated me' (flies away) muhahaha!! I'm very evil! My mother must be proud of me!!( keeps flying then looks back) wait why isnt that hedgehog following me?(sees sonic acting that there is an invisible wall) ehhhh...what...are you doing? (Sonic continues acting) come on I've started getting scared...( sonic continues) you know what, see you later...
Tails: wow sonic I didnt know that your that good at silent acting (sonic continues) you know what, lets just pop out in the next zone.
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This is actually decent, although Tails' line doesn't add anything to it. Trimming unnecessary dialogue is an important part of writing: if a line adds nothing to the scene, it will probably detract from it for that very reason.

Especially in a rapid-fire comedy situation like the shorts, where punctuality is the key.
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Will it be good if we took out tails' line?
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It has actually been some time sense the last time I attempted a idea for a short but I thought of something that may work. Also it's a bit scripted base to give a better picture, so please cut down or rework it however you so do please if need be to fit a timely matter of a short.

This following scenario takes place in the Archie universe using a alternate meeting situation of Evil sonic (Scourge before his transformation) and Sonic himself to lead into quite a awkward moment.

Sonic is currently out in the middle of the woods patrolling his turn on watch during the wake of night before yawning of boredom from having no form of action this night so he could showboat to the others how he beat swat bots again. That is until he hears a sound in the nearby brush.
Sonic: Come out I can hear you there!
???: Well Well looks like the cat is out of the bag
A shadow emerges from the brush and walks slowly to Sonics location.
Sonic: All right its about time for some fun.
Sonic smirks in delight before the silhouette enters the moonlights gaze revealing himself to look none other like Sonic himself save for his Black jacket and Sunglasses over his eyes.
Sonic: Hey you look just like me!
Evil Sonic: Well of course I am you, just a more vile you that is, see Robotnik kinda made me a deal with me in my world that if I were to destroy you I would be rewarded handsomely, See he believes it will take a Sonic to beat a Sonic and...
evil Sonics voice starts to fade as we zoom to sonic who seems to not even be paying attention before he speaks quite bluntly interrupting Evil Sonic.
Sonic: You know what! I never actually had a chance to really see myself in a mirror, like I know what I look like but never like this. I'm kinda good looking for a hedgehog if I do say so myself.
Evil sonic takes a step back and what he just herd.
Evil Sonic: W-what!? Didn't you hear a damn word I just said!? i am here to destroy you and send you to the afterlife!
Sonic moves to Evil sonic and smirks
Sonic: Ya know sally always told me I was good looking but I never know I was this good looking... i kinda want to touch me.
Evil sonic starts to flare up and back away.
Evil Sonic: N-No! Stay back! STAY BACK!
He says this as he quickly turns away and runs off into the darkness of the Forrest
Evil Sonic: He's mad! MAD!
Sonic: Oh no you don't me!
Sonic Runs off after Evil Sonic as the camera pans up onto the moon you hear evil sonic scream in mercy to whatever unknown Sonic is now doing to him

Okay it is a bit of a gay joke, I however being gay I kinda wanted to try one and thought this may be a creative spin on it. Though who knows the joke could suck or be bloody awesome I just wanted to try tiz all.
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Thursday Aug 28 2014, 01:26 AM
Will it be good if we took out tails' line?
The idea you've got going here is actually pretty solid, like Smegerama said. I'd say that everything up to until Sonic speaks is stuff you could keep. Everything that Sonic and Tails say here needs rewritten, since it's a little bit out of place and distracts you from the main joke: the invisible wall keeping you from moving on.

In fact, I would probably just scrap having Tails say anything, and maybe play around with the idea of Sonic not saying anything either. The gag is the invisible wall keeping Sonic from moving on, so keep your focus on that. What might also help the gag is keeping the text saying "Sonic cleared Act 2" on the screen, to help the audience identify the joke a bit better.

As for Jinsoku, your idea is decent as well, although I will mention a couple things that threw me off:

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Sonic: Hey you look just like me!
Evil Sonic: Well of course I am you, just a more vile you that is, see Robotnik kinda made me a deal with me in my world that if I were to destroy you I would be rewarded handsomely, See he believes it will take a Sonic to beat a Sonic and...
evil Sonics voice starts to fade as we zoom to sonic who seems to not even be paying attention before he speaks quite bluntly interrupting Evil Sonic.
Sonic: You know what! I never actually had a chance to really see myself in a mirror, like I know what I look like but never like this. I'm kinda good looking for a hedgehog if I do say so myself.

This is a lot of exposition that you don't need to make the gag work. This short is all about how Evil Sonic looks like Sonic, and we don't need to know Evil Sonic's back story in order to convey that they look alike.

For example, here's a quick trim I did of these three lines:

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Sonic: Hey you look just like me!
Evil Sonic: (in a not caring kind of tone): Well, duh. Tell me something I don't know.
Sonic: Now that I think about it, I've never actually had a chance to really see myself in a mirror before. And I have to admit, I'm pretty good lookin' if I do say so myself!

As for the ending, I personally think it's rather cliche and predictable, and also puts Sonic out of character. It's OK to show Sonic be unusually interested in himself, but I think you could show this in much more amusing and odd ways that inject more humor into the situation, but also keep Sonic in character.

For example, maybe Sonic could drag Evil Sonic into one of those photo booths (because a photo booth could totally just be sitting out in the middle of the woods), and get a bunch of pictures with him while he continues to try being grumpy and mean. Keep it very light-hearted, and don't get too dark or intimate. Focus on the fun of the situation and making the gag strong. :)
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